Best Mysteries Ever

By Richard Scarry

Poor Prince Tusk needs a rest.
Expansion: Prince Tusk, who hoarded all of his jewels while people in his kingdom starved, flared his eyes in annoyance as his servents tucked him into bed and massaged his feet. But who is climbing down that rope? It looks like the Royal Fortune-teller! No, it's Lady Cheetah, the famous jewel thief! She was only pretending to be the Royal Fortune-teller! That is how she stole Prince Tusk's jewels.

Now she's trying to steal Prince Tusk's giant ruby.
Close Read: after the more masculine and covered version stole all the jewels, when she is a female she is seen as greedy and not having enough even though we don't know the reason she is stealing

Suddenly, Sneef
Question: What if Sneef is trying to stay in the Kings good graces and not cut off himself from the special treatment he is getting pops out from under Prince Tusk's bed. "I've got you now!" he says.

"Oh no you don't!" says Lady Cheetah,
Close Read: Women are trickster theives, not even straightforward running off.

"Look down here! That's the truck where Lady Cheetah put the stolen jewels," Sneef says. "That gives me an idea."

Next to the treasure-laden truck, Sneef waits for Lady Cheetah with all Prince Tusk's guards.
Restory: Sneef knows that Lady Cheetah needs these jewels to pay for the medicine for her sick children, but he cannot afford to fall out of the king's favor. She needed to earn her money not simply steal it.

"Drat! That detective is such a nuisance!" says Lady Cheetah.

She tosses another small bottle on the ground.
Close Read: She is still shown as a trickster and not straighforward. The other stories with male characters are not as tricksterish.

Psshhh! A cloud of smoke rises from the bottle

"Until we meet again, Detective Sneef!" she says, as she escapes.
Expansion: She knew as long as no one would hire her due to her gender, she would have to continue to use theivory to provide for her.

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Close Read: after the more masculine and covered version stole all the jewels, when she is a female she is seen as greedy and not having enough even though we don't know the reason she is stealing
Expansion: Prince Tusk, who hoarded all of his jewels while people in his kingdom starved, flared his eyes in annoyance as his servents tucked him into bed and massaged his feet.
Question: What if Sneef is trying to stay in the Kings good graces and not cut off himself from the special treatment he is getting
Close Read: Women are trickster theives, not even straightforward
Restory: Sneef knows that Lady Cheetah needs these jewels to pay for the medicine for her sick children, but he cannot afford to fall out of the king's favor. She needed to earn her money not simply steal it.
Close Read: She is still shown as a trickster and not straighforward. The other stories with male characters are not as tricksterish.
Expansion: She knew as long as no one would hire her due to her gender, she would have to continue to use theivory to provide for her.
Replace: glances around hungerly